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12 April 2009 @ 10:18 pm
kissing and the quiet [jaejoong/yunho]  
kissing and the quiet
jaejoong/yunho
pg
written in 30 minutes
jaejoong likes playing games but all yunho wants to do is kiss him.







"give me your hand." jaejoong says. he's done with his third cup of soju. they're lounging on the carpet in the living room, bare feet curled into the soft wool.

yunho obeys, there's no reason not to, when jaejoong is smiling like that, eyes glazed over with relaxed inebriation. he sticks out his hand and jaejoong takes it.

jaejoong doesn't say anything at first, as if mesmerized by the map of veins and lines trailing their way across yunho's hand. his fingers trace yunho's lifeline, starting from his wrist to where it tapers off near yunho's thumb. it tickles. yunho's fingers almost jerk close instinctively.

he doesn't let them.

jaejoong looks up at him with a mischievous grin and yunho smiles, eyes crinkling.

bored, jaejoong brings yunho's right hand to his mouth, his breath is warm, fanning against yunho's palm. he laughs, the hot air hitting yunho's skin in short spurts.

"try to guess what i'm saying."

yunho closes his eyes, focuses on the brush of jaejoong's lips on his palm, lightly at first, then more certain.


at first, he can't tell what jaejoong's saying, not at all. he just feels jaejoong's lips; soft pink and plush against his skin, moving, but in a way he hasn't learned to understand. jaejoong hums quietly, under his breath, and then yunho remembers. this is jaejoong, this he understands.

yunho opens his eyes to watch him. jaejoong's lifts his eyes to meet his, dark and full of secret promises. jaejoong pulls away, dropping yunho's palm lightly, licking his lips.

yunho swallows.

"love." yunho guesses and jaejoong looks pleased. it's not that difficult to guess. yunho knows jaejoong inside out, better than jaejoong thinks he knows himself. jaejoong is a romantic, and painfully honest.

"wrong."

yunho looks confused.

"what?"

jaejoong tilts his head to smile at him. but is that disappointment lurking in his eyes? "i thought you'd say that. but you guessed wrong."

yunho tugs him by the wrist and jaejoong comes willingly, crawling close, pressing himself into yunho's chest. he sighs contentedly, his nose brushing yunho's cheek.

"guess again."

jaejoong's eyes are bright, this time its not the soju.

jaejoong's breath skitters uncertainly against yunho's mouth. yunho catches his chin between a thumb and forefingers, guides him so their mouths are perfectly aligned.

"here," yunho says, barely above a whisper. "it's easier to guess here."

jaejoong's going slightly cross-eyed watching the beauty mark above yunho's mouth. he doesn't move, stays perfectly still so their mouths remain perfectly aligned, less than a centimeter apart.

yunho exhales. jaejoong's eyes flick towards his, afraid? maybe, maybe not. just curious.

"tell me again." yunho says.

"here?" jaejoong's voice is barely above a whisper.

in the background, junsu's laughter rings out from the closed bedroom door. eu kyang kyang. eu kyang kyang.

yunho nods.

"here."

jaejoong leans in slightly. their noses bump. he closes his eyes. exhales. the warm air hits yunho's skin, a taunting promise of what is to come.

yunho doesn't like waiting. he tilts his face up, the slightest inch and their mouths are touching.

there's no electricity, no tension, no lust, no want. just two bodies pressed against each other, two mouths, two people breathing.

tell me. yunho's lips move against jaejoong's, soundlessly.

but you know, jaejoong responds, mouth pressed to yunho's. yunho puts his hand on jaejoong's collarbone, near to his throat, feels the lack of vibration, the lack of sound. jaejoong shudders into his touch.

tell me anyway.

yunho kisses him, properly this time, mouths and breaths mingling and jaejoong melts beneath him, lips parting. yunho's tongue slides into his mouth, tangling with his own, hot and wanting and oh so desperate that jaejoong forgets to breathe altogether.

yunho pulls away, unconsciously running his tongue over his lips.

"forever," he lifts his hand to jaejoong's cheek, fingertips lingering on his skin, soft like butterflies.

jaejoong looks slightly dazed. "what?"

"what you said," yunho says quietly.

"forever."

 
 
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( 74 comments — Leave a comment )
dardyn: YJ; love has found a waylovefounds on April 12th, 2009 03:00 pm (UTC)
beautiful! ♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:56 pm (UTC)
♥s thank you! :D
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99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:57 pm (UTC)
haha i know. totally killing it grammatically but it just looks so much prettier like this.

thank you! the idea just popped into my head and then it pretty much wrote itself. i loved reading your comment :)
let there be songhybridchickens on April 12th, 2009 03:24 pm (UTC)
that's so gorgeous. ;______; ♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:58 pm (UTC)
thank you! :D
delurking sockpoppet of a lurkeralbeitalways on April 12th, 2009 03:47 pm (UTC)
...this fic...
is made of:
pure win! win! win!

it's sentimental yes but not done in an overbearing way, the use of words conveys a lighthearted impression to the readers. makes me crave for more lol^^

*gives cookies* tnx for writing this lovely fic.
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:58 pm (UTC)
thank you!

for the lovely comment! :)
xrurutiax: pic#83900597rurutia88 on April 12th, 2009 03:49 pm (UTC)
Sweeeeeeeet and beautifuuuuuuuuuuul!!!!!!!!
thats all i can say...
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:59 pm (UTC)
haha. yay! :) thanks for reading!
isamijae on April 12th, 2009 03:50 pm (UTC)
Really beautifully written! ♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 03:59 pm (UTC)
thank you. i loved writing it! :)
bummey408bummey408 on April 12th, 2009 04:24 pm (UTC)

"forever"
"what you said,"
"forever"
luv it.
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 04:57 pm (UTC)


tysm!
jaejaelover33jaejaelover33 on April 12th, 2009 04:33 pm (UTC)
This, was so heart-warming. I definately enjoyed it.
Wow, you have such a way with writing. It's so beautiful.
Thank you!~ ^_^
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 04:58 pm (UTC)
<3

thank you for the compliment! :D i'm so glad you liked it.
heartoffire03 on April 12th, 2009 05:27 pm (UTC)

i, i, i, i, i, omg so beautiful ;_;
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 06:53 pm (UTC)
tysm! ♥
Quiet_Heartachequiet_heartache on April 12th, 2009 06:55 pm (UTC)
ohhhhhh such a breathtaking scenario...literally by the end :D

thanks
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 07:03 pm (UTC)


i'm glad you liked it. :)
vanity_abovevanity_above on April 12th, 2009 06:57 pm (UTC)
Loved it <3 beautifully written <3
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 12th, 2009 07:03 pm (UTC)


thank you so very much.
bundles and bundles of loooooove: micky 2mearii87 on April 12th, 2009 08:49 pm (UTC)
so beautiful.

*dying*
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:41 am (UTC)
aww, thank you!

*revives*
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99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:45 am (UTC)
haha oh, junsu. way to ruin the mood. xD

thank you! :)
tine_cheese (Christine genna)tine_cheese on April 13th, 2009 02:15 am (UTC)
aawwww! That was beatutiful in so many ways. ^_^ I loved it! Junsu's laugh was bit random though. lol.
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:46 am (UTC)
thank you~

and yes, junsu does tend to be very random most of the time. :D
Srijoni_Rheasrijoni_rhea on April 13th, 2009 06:55 am (UTC)
jkkhsakjdhaksjdhsakjd so beautiful, i'm smiling so hard♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:46 am (UTC)


thank you!i love incoherency! :D
Unsent Letters: Kanbe - Bittersweet Cafechildishgrin on April 13th, 2009 07:29 am (UTC)
I shall use my icon to express my opinion of your fic.

... :3
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:47 am (UTC)
^________________^
ヴィシ | 비시: ho whore jaevicshi on April 13th, 2009 08:58 am (UTC)
u and ur beautiful words <3
pls be writing more
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 13th, 2009 10:47 am (UTC)
thank you. i'll work on it! :)
crying on the rainapplepieprinces on April 13th, 2009 11:21 am (UTC)
*KEYBOARDSMASHING* MAKE OUT Y/Y?

im usually not perverted but i havent had sleep so forgive me
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 14th, 2009 03:24 am (UTC)
totally Y/Y! ♥
lovelykitten8lovelykitten8 on April 13th, 2009 03:28 pm (UTC)
so cute
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 14th, 2009 03:25 am (UTC)
:)
Too FAST to live Too YOUNG to [Die]: yunjae you and me liveshigai on April 13th, 2009 08:04 pm (UTC)
really beautiful <3
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 14th, 2009 03:26 am (UTC)
aww, thank you. :)
イッサンmiya_fangirl on April 14th, 2009 06:07 am (UTC)
That was so mind blowing...

I was reading while listening to the song Never Think by Rob Pattinson. It somehow fit SO. perfectly.

Wow.

<333
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 14th, 2009 10:34 am (UTC)
thank you.

i'll download it and try reading this with never think as the bgm. :)
Jasmineriiche on April 14th, 2009 09:55 am (UTC)
jaejoong's breath skitters uncertainly against yunho's mouth. yunho catches his chin between a thumb and forefingers, guides him so their mouths are perfectly aligned.

"here," yunho says, barely above a whisper. "it's easier to guess here."


I was hardly breathing while reading this. It's so intimate, so incredibly close. It's so hard to write this sort of romance, and you just got it so perfectly. Ahhh, I'm a little incoherent, but this was so beautiful ♥ :') Loved it so much.


Edited at 2009-04-14 09:56 am (UTC)
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 14th, 2009 10:43 am (UTC)
i love when people tell me what they like/hate about my fic ♥

and incoherency's a huge compliment, so thank you! :)

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AND I JUST REALISED YOU'RE quirke! ♥

which just makes me double happy because I adore your stuff!
Melodyhelloeccentric on April 14th, 2009 11:58 am (UTC)
:D, i adore the intimacy. it's comfortable, sweet, with a sense of trust somewhere. i don't know; i'm pretty incoherent but i like this so very much. ♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 16th, 2009 06:22 pm (UTC)
<3 thank you!

incoherency is love. :)
음악 그냥 음악이다~♥: JaeHo_Hugblinkable on April 15th, 2009 06:57 am (UTC)
"Just sit back and enjoy the view" ~ ♥
I am listening to David Choi's Always Hurt while reading this and I just feel so contented as a whole...this is so beautiful ;D
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 16th, 2009 06:23 pm (UTC)
contentment is always a lovely thing to feel. :D

thank you!
~♥Hope to the End. Always Keep the Faith♥~chloe1910 on April 15th, 2009 09:47 am (UTC)
gkahdgkahdgkajhglkahldkfgavxvmzbvmzbk!!! so sweet..I'm turning inot a puddle of Yunjae goo....♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
99lbs above gravitycountingcarbs on April 16th, 2009 06:23 pm (UTC)
&hearts~ aww thank you
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